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100 Word Challenge (Due for Tuesday 5th May)

  • 29th Apr, 2015 at 3:14pm

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  • cameron
    6th May, 2015 at 3:00pmm

    My journey to Rivlin started on a Monday afternoon at four o’clock to five o’clock me and my friends went to rivlin to play on the park and do some parkour and we went with the dog and the dog jumped into the water and after we had dinner there I had a bacon sandwich and for dessert I had a scone and then we went home and played football and after I went into the shower and went to bed.

    • Miss Fearn
      12th May, 2015 at 3:46amm

      Good. Remember to include full stops, one “and” per sentence.

  • Evelyn
    4th May, 2015 at 5:52pmm

    My journey to Riverlin valley was amazing .Me and my friends went there on our bikes ,it was fun .We wore our swimming costumes underneath our clothes so we could play in the water!We rode round the river first and then played in the water,the water was freezing cold! Then we decided to stick to the bikes. The pathes were really rocky! It was so much fun!!

    • Miss Fearn
      12th May, 2015 at 7:13amm

      An exciting adventure.

  • Dani
    4th May, 2015 at 5:20pmm

    River rivelin
    One day a girl was walkin with her dog down river rivelin. Her dog ran into the river to play with a strange bird,it has large wings that were fluffy,a big beek and a long,tall neck.the big bird got scared and flew away down the river.They walked down the river to where the bird was.They saw it eat a fish the fish wabbled all the way down its throut and then after the bird ate the fish it made its feathers tuffen up to make it look fiecer.
    By: Dani Marples

    • Miss Fearn
      12th May, 2015 at 6:53amm

      Brilliant use of adjectives.

  • Katie
    4th May, 2015 at 9:01amm

    My leasurely stroll through riverlin was so beautiful . The sound of the river is amazing. It gives my mind a rest. You can collect up all your thoughts and relax. If you want you can have a paddle in the river, it really refreshes your feet. I love going to river riverlin!!

    • Miss Fearn
      12th May, 2015 at 4:08amm

      Sounds very calming.

  • Eoghan
    3rd May, 2015 at 7:03pmm

    On my journey along Rivelin Valley I saw many birds such as robins, owls and ducks. The river wound its way long through the trees and bushes with tiny rapids and small waterfalls. Wild flowers grew amongst the grassy banks. To cross the river there are small stone bridges and even stepping-stones. In some places where old mill ponds remain, strange swamps exist, tangled bushes and reeds, watch out there may be crocodiles in there?

    • Miss Fearn
      12th May, 2015 at 7:20amm

      Sounds like an exploring adventure. We’ll done.

  • Laurie
    3rd May, 2015 at 9:41amm

    I was walking through Rivelin and I came across this valley. I walked to the other side of the road and looked down into the river and saw something very small I didn’t know what it was. There was a net at the other side of me I went to get it and went closer and put my net in the river.Later on there was a little tug at the net I pulled it up and it was a rare golden wishing fish I knew by the little crown on its head. My wish was for a dolphin!
    What is your wish?

    • Miss Fearn
      12th May, 2015 at 6:35amm

      I like your idea of the wishing fish.

  • Harry
    2nd May, 2015 at 2:56pmm

    I have been to Rivelin Valley loads of times before.
    When you walk in there is a cafeteria on the right further up the hill, the toilets on your left and a playground up the hill right in front of you.
    If you look at the big slide, at the front, on the left, there should be a bridge.
    This bridge goes over the river Rivelin.
    If you cross the bridge there should be a path.
    Then, after you’ve turned right, you walk along the path.
    You should, eventually, come across a chair called ‘The Wishing Chair’ on an island.

  • Harry
    2nd May, 2015 at 2:55pmm

    I have been to Rivelin Valley loads of times before.
    When you walk in there is a cafeteria on the right further up the hill, the toilets on your left and a playground up the hill right in front of you.
    If you look at the big slide, at the front, on the left, there should be a bridge.
    This bridge goes other the river Rivelin.
    If you cross the bridge there should be a path.
    Then, after you’ve turned right, you walk along the path.
    You should, eventually, come across a chair called ‘The Wishing Chair’ on an island.

    • Miss Fearn
      13th May, 2015 at 4:59amm

      Useful information. I wonder if we’ll pass them when we visit there?

  • Jacintha
    2nd May, 2015 at 2:26pmm

    Today in the morning, me and my family went to see River Rivelin and it was a bad choice because the weather was cold. The water was freezing and when we got to the other side of the stone steps, my mum and dad said we should go back home because it was too cold. I was grateful at what my mum and dad said though it meant walking on the really cold stone steps. When we reached home, my mum gave me a cup of Hot Chocolate and we went for Shopping. We saw River Rivelin, the way back.

    • Miss Fearn
      13th May, 2015 at 9:39amm

      I like this story, the hot chocolate sounds tempting.

  • Cicely
    2nd May, 2015 at 11:41amm

    The water was crystal clear as I slowly walked through the valley. The sunshine was beaming through the trees, dancing on the water. The grass was soft and gently moving in the breeze. There was the sky, as blue as eyes, the clouds as fluffy as a blanket. I wandered down the path along the river just to see a beautiful rainbow. How I wished I could go and find the pot of golden coins. If I carry on along the path who knows…

    • Miss Fearn
      12th May, 2015 at 7:08amm

      We’ll done, a fantastic description of the sun and river.

  • Grace
    29th Apr, 2015 at 7:39pmm

    My journey through Rivelin Valley was such an adventure. I was outside, Saturday afternoon, reading in the sun, when my mum told me that if I find her glasses, which she left at Rivelin valley, I would be allowed to play out with Jenny.
    Ten minutes later I was on my bike cycling along the bank, searching for the glasses. Soon I came to a large tree trunk, which had a lot of poisonous ivy crawling up the side. The glasses lay there covered in it. I reached out to get them, but my foot slipped and I fell in………

  • Grace
    29th Apr, 2015 at 7:37pmm

    My journey through Rivelin Valley was such an adventure. I was outside, Saturday afternoon, reading in the sun, when my mum told me that if I find her glasses, which she left at Rivelin valley, I would be allowed to play out with Jenny.
    Ten minutes later I was on my bike cycling along the bank, searching for the glasses. Soon I came to a large tree trunk, which had a lot of poisoners ivy crawling up the side, the glasses lay there covered in it. I reached out to get them, but my foot slipped and I fell in………

    • Miss Fearn
      11th May, 2015 at 12:58pmm

      An exciting story.

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