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100 word story- 25th September 2015

  • 26th Sep, 2015 at 9:47am

The Prodigal Son

How is Paul feeling in this scene? Write about what he is thinking and feeling at this moment. Use super sentences and WOW words in your description.

 

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  • Lydia
    17th Oct, 2015 at 12:42pmm

    Paul was fed up. He realised that family was more mportant than riches. He had an idea, he could go home! Simple, his father wouldn’t love him the same though so he could just be a servant. He had betrayed his father and he was sorry for what he had done. Besides he had learnt his lesson and would not do it again.

  • harry2
    11th Oct, 2015 at 9:36pmm

    Once there was a man called Paul who left his family and spent his money .But look at him now, eating the pigs share, all sad inside. Paul is now thinking why did he betray his father, after all his father had done for him. On the outside ( he appeared popular) on the inside ( what have I done my father will not forgive me). His father’s farm was like a palace in comparison to what he had now. But he wanted to live in the city, drinking beer with strangers and wearing quality clothes, but this was not a real sense of belonging.

  • Ella
    9th Oct, 2015 at 6:53pmm

    Paul thought in despair as he watched the greedy pigs finish the last of the food. If only Paul hadn’t spent all his money, if only he had some food to eat then he wouldn’t be living in this condition. Paul decided to back to the place where he will be fed and loved, his fathers house. Paul set off on a long and weiry journey. He walked for miles and miles. He finally saw his fathers house in the distance and decided to run and tell him his reason for returning………to be continued…..

  • James
    5th Oct, 2015 at 6:50pmm

    Paul. What had he done to deserve this? He had had fun with his friends all the time and had forgotten to think about who he really was. He was a farmer’s son, not this mad party animal! Feeling damp and dreary he suddenly understood. He should go back home! He needed a new start… what else could he do? His only job offer so far was feeding some pigs! He thought his father would never let him come back, so he needed an idea… He sprang up from his muddy pool, He would go back as a worker!
    So he set off for home, skipping merrily as he went.

  • Amber
    4th Oct, 2015 at 5:36pmm

    As Paul sat pondering over how his life had turned out so lonely and horrible now, he realised how lucky he had been living with his father and brother . He was cold , hungry and very dirty. “What have I done? Paul thought to himself. ” I have been so foolish and greedy, I have squandered all of my money away , on people who don’t even care about me, and they have all left me now that I am poor. “I want to change and show my family how sorry I am , so I will go home and make amends for ever and ever.

  • Declan
    4th Oct, 2015 at 3:03pmm

    Look at Paul now how could he have been so stupid why did he choose to leave home. It seems Paul here is in a very sticky situation. As the weeks went by Paul got used to the barn but it was still not as good as being at home with his family. At that moment Paul new what he was going to. He was to set of home the next day. When Paul woke up he explained to the pig farmer how he was going to leave the farmer wished him good luck and he was on his way. It was a very long trip for Paul as he had lost his horse .when he got home his father was happier than ever and they had a part

  • Caitlin
    4th Oct, 2015 at 3:01pmm

    Look at Paul now how could he have been so stupid why did he choose to leave home. It seems Paul here is in a very sticky situation. As the weeks went by Paul got used to the barn but it was still not as good as being at home with his family. At that moment Paul new what he was going to. He was to set of home the next day. When Paul woke up he explained to the pig farmer how he was going to leave the farmer wished him good luck and he was on his way. It was a very long trip for Paul as he had lost his horse .when he got home his father was happier than ever and they had a party

  • Miguel
    1st Oct, 2015 at 6:27pmm

    “… Look at me now; I’m dirty, cold, and hungry. I have to share the pigs’ feed and living space. My ‘friends’ left me, they liked me only for my money, I bought them things and when I was poor, they didn’t give me anything in return. Nothing! I had everything, family and a brother. If I just hadn’t left them, I’d be well clothed, clean and loved. I left because working at the farm was boring, I didn’t like working there, and I was lazy and carless about my family. I should’ve stayed at home. Anyway, in the city it didn’t feel as good as home sweet home…”

  • Laura
    27th Sep, 2015 at 6:26pmm

    What have I done, I have destroyed everything in my life. I have been so stupid spending money on people I don’t know.
    I wish I had never left my father, he fed me, looked after me and cared for me, while I was nasty to him and my brother. All I wanted was not to work and look what that has done for me now.
    And there was never any pretty girls in the town.

    • Mrs Barrett
      27th Sep, 2015 at 10:17pmm

      Excellent Laura. Well done. * stamp

  • Matthew
    27th Sep, 2015 at 3:50pmm

    Paul felt depressed about the last week! He wished he had stayed home! Stayed with the people he truly loved! If only he had waited to take his share of the money! Then he wouldn’t be in this trouble! Then he had an idea. He should head home. Not as a son but a servant. He tried to think of a way there. For he did not want to walk. Bad thoughts ran round his head shouting their loudest. Paul couldn’t ignore them. Then he stood up and decided to go, packing only pig feed, he set off. He must find his family.

    • Mrs Barrett
      27th Sep, 2015 at 10:16pmm

      Great work Matthew. * stamp.

  • Harry 1
    27th Sep, 2015 at 3:09pmm

    Paul was devastated with his decision to forget and leave his dad. He chose to be greedy and leave behind one of the only people who loved him. Paul spent all his dad’s money on alcohol, horses and food, only to be left with regret and filthy pigs. Paul had the same daily routine day after day, he got bored and he decided to go back to his father’s farm. Paul hope he would forgive him!

    • Mrs Barrett
      27th Sep, 2015 at 10:16pmm

      Great description Harry. (Hope you are feeling better too!) * stamp

  • Harry 1
    27th Sep, 2015 at 2:58pmm

    I like Ryan’s description!

  • Sara
    27th Sep, 2015 at 2:02pmm

    On the outside Paul looked like a beaten tramp. (On the inside he was kicking himself for being so stupid.)He had left his father’s farm early with dreams of living in the city, and had wasted his time drinking wine with his so called friends. When he had gone bankrupt he had ended up a tramp until he’d got his job in this pigsty. At his elbow a pig grunted. Paul turned around and saw it nudging a manky looking carrot in his direction. His stomach rumbled. Slowly he chewed on the revolting, gross carrot. It really was very repulsive. He suddenly became homesick.

    • Mrs Barrett
      27th Sep, 2015 at 10:14pmm

      Great work Sara- particularly the outside (inside) sentence. * stamp

    • alex
      19th Nov, 2015 at 3:24pmm

      poor Paul! ( alliteration unintentional )

  • Charlotte
    27th Sep, 2015 at 1:28pmm

    Paul was homesick. He couldn’t believe how silly he had been taking all the money. He took a nibble of the rich pig food but spit it out straight away. He couldn’t stop thinking about his Father. His home seemed palatial compared to where he was now. But he couldn’t complain, the pig keeper could have just left him on the dusty street. But if he had stayed at home, if he hadn’t left his Father, then he would be safe and sound. For now he had to make do with what he was given.

    • Mrs Barrett
      27th Sep, 2015 at 10:13pmm

      Excellent use of the word palatial. Great description. * stamp.

  • Seamus
    27th Sep, 2015 at 1:00pmm

    Paul looked at himself. Who was he? What was he? The vivid memories of so called fun came back.” Am I really doomed to live like this,” he thought. Then he remembered his brother , his dad. His greedy decision to go and spend his half lingered in his mind for a moment before he shook them out. Who would help me now? He thought before giving in to rest and falling into a deep sleep.

    • Mrs Barrett
      27th Sep, 2015 at 10:11pmm

      Excellent description Seamus. * stamp

  • Ryan 1
    26th Sep, 2015 at 5:07pmm

    Paul was in despair. He was regretting his greedy decision to take his share of his dad’s possessions early, to go travelling. He felt depressed and took pity on himself. Paul did not know where to go or what to do. He thought he would be stuck on a farm eating with the pigs for the rest of his life. He began to realise that family is worth a whole lot more than money and he wanted to apologise for his mistakes. He somehow needed to find a way to get back to the riches in his life; his family.

    • Mrs Barrett
      26th Sep, 2015 at 7:56pmm

      What a fantastic description Ryan. Very well done. *stamp 🙂

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